"Let the Lord of Chaos rule."
not-so-short story inspired from Sins of a Solar Empire
Published on November 27, 2008 By Fokxnim In Sins of a Solar Empire

Sinners

 

***Sinners has been discontinued. See last page for details.***

 

Sinners is currently (as of Febuary 15)...172 pages!

Part 2 HAS BEGUN! Here's the teaser for those of you who haven't seen it yet, or would like to be reminded of what's to come.

Part 2: Destruction

Teaser

 

 

Kol:

captured by the vicious Mani'k, can Kol escape from the Vasari before he himself is turned into one of the Vasari? And even if he can manage to escape, the Guild of Marksmen is out there, looking for him...

Archie:

Sent back to his home planet to solve a streak of murders committed by a close friend, will he join the murderer? Or will he pay the ultimate sacrifice?

Zeke:

Forever battling for control of his body, Zeke's psionic powers are growing stronger, and Alfr'eda is growing frightened. Can a Silent One rejoin the Unity? What would that mean for her? In the meantime, there are Sinners to purge. But her next target may be the most difficult and dangerous yet....The Prime Chancellor himself.

Jessica:

After the great Admiral Kol mysteriously disappears, Jessica steps up to pick up the empty seat of power. But others want the coveted Admiral position as well, and they will stop at nothing to get it. Does the "female Kol" have what it takes to reach Admiralty without the powers of a Marksman? Or will she just be a listing in the number of dead as the contestants fight to the death--for some of them--literally?

Veronica:

Her power taken away "indefinitely" by Haiti, she is forced to hide herself as one of the Vasari's Mani'k. Will her loyalty to the Unity remain strong enough to do what she must with the human prisoner? Or will she help Kol escape to rebel against Haiti in the only pitiful, desperate way she can? And if she aides the terran, will Kol return the sympathy or will he himself capture her?

Agent Karridan:

An Advent spy sent to the Trader worlds to discreetly scout out psionically-active humans that could be spared the destruction of the Reemergence, he hears rumors of a mysterious and deadly killer, and finds himself strangely intrigued. Sneaking into a recent crime scene, Karridan notices a faint psionic residue, and immediately stashes himself in Archie Kol's team as they hunt the murderer. The resulting explosion when he comes into contact with Zeke and Alfr'eda? A thousand suns undergoing supernova will not compare.

Professor Newman:

Working himself near to exhaustion, trying furiously to complete his project before command shuts him down, Newman is running out of time. For himself and for the TEC. Will he succeed? Welcome to the Novalith Project.

Sinners on Blogspot:

http://cisinners.blogspot.com/

 


Comments (Page 4)
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on Feb 22, 2009

Good job man! keep it up!

 

Fujuki

on Feb 23, 2009

keep up the good work!  glad you didn't quit when you lost your original chapters

on Feb 23, 2009

Fujuki
There is no way I can force a writer to write against his will... but if you find it in your heart to continue then by all means please do. When you do something from the bottom of your heart and enjoy it then it does not matter what people do or do not. I like it and would give you karma but I do not know how, do you? Is there a button for it or something? If you tell me then I can give karma to every good story I find... a good story always deserves some karma and yours is.

Anyway, please don't think I am bribing you or something. Peace man, out.

 

Fujuki

There is a little thumbs up icon at the bottom left of their post.  click that to give them Karma.

on Feb 23, 2009

Already ahead of ya'. I even gave you karma dude!

 

Fujuki

on Feb 24, 2009

thanks!

-Orodum

 

on Feb 24, 2009

well iv been working out a chart for the military ranks, once i start going into space in my story. This is close to being the finished product, and as such I would love suggestions on any of these ranks that just do not rub right with you. Any comments at all.

 the boxes that have no name mean theres no rank of that kind in that race. just to clear that up.

U.S. NAVY RANK

 

 

 

SINS RANK - TEC

 

 

 

SINS RANK - ADVENT

 

 

 

SINS RANK - VASARI

 

 

 

Seaman Recruit

Apprentice

Acolyte Recruit

Slave

Seaman Apprentice

Senior Apprentice

Acolyte

Grunt

Seaman

Crew

Cleric

----------

Petty Officer 3rd Class

Petty Officer 3rd Class

Minuscule Mindbattler 3rd Class

Slaver, 3rd Class

Petty Officer 2nd Class

Petty Officer 2nd Class

Minuscule Mindbattler 2nd Class

Slaver, 2nd Class

Petty Officer 1st Class

Petty Officer 1st Class

Minuscule Mindbattler 1st Class

Slaver, 1st Class

Chief Petty Officer

Chief Petty Officer

Chief Minuscule Mindbattler

Abdul Sentorian

Senior Chief Petty Officer

Senior Chief Petty Officer

Mindbattler

Minor Eliminator

Master Chief Petty Officer

Senior Officer

Senior Mindbattler

Senior Eliminator

Fleet/Command Master Chief Petty Officer

Master Chief

Psiadvocate

Commander of the Deck

Warrant Officer

Warrant Officer

Psiwarrior

Invasion Specialist

Chief Warrant Officer 2

Chief Warrant Officer 2

Senior Psiwarrior 4th Class

Head Bombardier, Rank 4

Chief Warrant Officer 3

Chief Warrant Officer 3

Senior Psiwarrior 3rd Class

Head Bombardier, Rank 3

Chief Warrant Officer 4

Chief Warrant Officer 4

Senior Psiwarrior 2nd Class

Head Bombardier, Rank 2

Chief Warrant Officer 5

Chief Warrant Officer 5

Senior Psiwarrior 1st Class

Head Bombardier, Rank 1

Ensign

Ensign

Manipulator

Eviscerate

Lieutenant, Junior Grade

Lieutenant, Junior Grade

Mind Control, Junior Strength

Warrior of the Remnants

Lieutenant

Lieutenant

Mind Control, Rank 1

Elite Warrior of the Remnants

Lieutenant Commander

Lieutenant Commander

Advanced Mind Control

Tactician of the Fleet

Commander

Commander

Crusader

Sightblinder

Captain

Captain

Crusader of the Truth

Captain

Rear Admiral, Lower Half (Commodore)

Commodore

Senior Crusader of the Unity

Coarse General

Rear Admiral, Upper Half

Rear Admiral of the Fleet

Fleet Master

General

Vice Admiral

Vice Admiral

Fleet Premier

Refined Demolitionist

Admiral Chief of Naval Operations/ Commandant of the Coast Guard

Admiral Chief of Spacial Operations

-------------

High Captain

Fleet Admiral

Fleet Admiral

Coalescence

Fleet Admiral Commander

gotta giv the credit where its due, the U.S. Navy ranks i got from:

http://www.militaryfactory.com/ranks/navy_ranks.asp

on Feb 24, 2009

woops i posted that list twice, betr delete it on this one and fill it with random dribble so itll let me keep the changes. so let me recap. ANY ideas u hav for a change in these rankings, let me no. but if u wanna lean towards thinking up better ones for the Vasari and the chief warrant officers of the TEC, i wouldnt mind. those were the ones i was least happy about.

o, and scroll to the right on the list to get to the vasari names. the scroll bars on the bottom.

on Feb 25, 2009

hey guys! if ur not looking at the first title page think marked READ! READ! DONT SKIP!, i would advise you to do that. i post special updates to the story, there, and any other revelant information there. like the link to the galaxyforge file of Vorg's flight from the Vasari Empire. u gotta always giv that first thing a quick glance, to make sure ur not missing out on anything.

on Feb 25, 2009

dang,dude

you should, like copy and paste this into word or somting and publish this!

(it could use a TINY bit more work but...DANG it awsome!!!)

 

on Feb 25, 2009

im actually got all this in jarte.

but i cant publish without permission from the ironclad guys

that would be illegal

big no-no

on Feb 25, 2009

well than get perm. this is awsome (the stardock guys shouldm totaly read this, if they havent already)

on Feb 26, 2009

ha thanks, but i cant ask them to let me publish it. at least not till iv got it almost completely done. WHICH I CANT DO IF NO ONE OFFERS SUGGESTIONS ON THE RANKING CHART!  (thats a hint to talk about it)

maybe they'll skim over it while checking on the forums one day and like it, but right now im just gonna concentrate on making the story awesome. refining it. then maybe ill ask around about publishing. tho thatll be a year later at the least, they time it takes to write a real book. best i can say, keep this post alive until then!   (would really like comments on the chart)

on Feb 26, 2009

maybe making the ranks a different language, eh?  at least for Vasari.  In the game manual, there was mention of a rank in their language.  (and "petty warrior"  is above "head bombardier"?)

on Feb 26, 2009

Orodum
maybe making the ranks a different language, eh?  at least for Vasari.  In the game manual, there was mention of a rank in their language.  (and "petty warrior"  is above "head bombardier"?)

thank you, Orodum. The manual doesnt actually name a specific Vasari rank, they just name the Dark Fleet. Dark Fleet Veerr. and well, petty warrior of the remnants is a hefty impressive name, but yeah, i see your point. petty has to go.

on Feb 27, 2009

I'd drop the "junior strength" from fleet master junior strength.  it almost sounds like an oxymoron.  Its effectively like a junior admiral.  My suggestion would be to change it to "vice fleet master" and make "fleet master high grade" just "fleet master"

 

also maybe consider changing grunt in the vasari ranks to slave since you have slaver right above them

 

3rd slave

2nd slave

1st slave

or

slave

fleet serf

imperial servant

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