"Let the Lord of Chaos rule."
not-so-short story inspired from Sins of a Solar Empire
Published on November 27, 2008 By Fokxnim In Sins of a Solar Empire

Sinners

 

***Sinners has been discontinued. See last page for details.***

 

Sinners is currently (as of Febuary 15)...172 pages!

Part 2 HAS BEGUN! Here's the teaser for those of you who haven't seen it yet, or would like to be reminded of what's to come.

Part 2: Destruction

Teaser

 

 

Kol:

captured by the vicious Mani'k, can Kol escape from the Vasari before he himself is turned into one of the Vasari? And even if he can manage to escape, the Guild of Marksmen is out there, looking for him...

Archie:

Sent back to his home planet to solve a streak of murders committed by a close friend, will he join the murderer? Or will he pay the ultimate sacrifice?

Zeke:

Forever battling for control of his body, Zeke's psionic powers are growing stronger, and Alfr'eda is growing frightened. Can a Silent One rejoin the Unity? What would that mean for her? In the meantime, there are Sinners to purge. But her next target may be the most difficult and dangerous yet....The Prime Chancellor himself.

Jessica:

After the great Admiral Kol mysteriously disappears, Jessica steps up to pick up the empty seat of power. But others want the coveted Admiral position as well, and they will stop at nothing to get it. Does the "female Kol" have what it takes to reach Admiralty without the powers of a Marksman? Or will she just be a listing in the number of dead as the contestants fight to the death--for some of them--literally?

Veronica:

Her power taken away "indefinitely" by Haiti, she is forced to hide herself as one of the Vasari's Mani'k. Will her loyalty to the Unity remain strong enough to do what she must with the human prisoner? Or will she help Kol escape to rebel against Haiti in the only pitiful, desperate way she can? And if she aides the terran, will Kol return the sympathy or will he himself capture her?

Agent Karridan:

An Advent spy sent to the Trader worlds to discreetly scout out psionically-active humans that could be spared the destruction of the Reemergence, he hears rumors of a mysterious and deadly killer, and finds himself strangely intrigued. Sneaking into a recent crime scene, Karridan notices a faint psionic residue, and immediately stashes himself in Archie Kol's team as they hunt the murderer. The resulting explosion when he comes into contact with Zeke and Alfr'eda? A thousand suns undergoing supernova will not compare.

Professor Newman:

Working himself near to exhaustion, trying furiously to complete his project before command shuts him down, Newman is running out of time. For himself and for the TEC. Will he succeed? Welcome to the Novalith Project.

Sinners on Blogspot:

http://cisinners.blogspot.com/

 


Comments (Page 10)
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on Apr 17, 2009

guywhoyoudontno


let me no if u didnt catch this, cause i wasnt sure i made it obvious enough. i will change it to make it more obvious if people missed that connection.


It seemed pretty obvious to me...

 

on Apr 17, 2009

if you follow the current abbreviations in the navy/army/etc. it's Tactical Command

PACFLTCOM - Pacific Fleet Command

ATLFLTCOM - (Atlantic might be dif abbrev.) Atlantic Fleet command

etc.

If you assume that time has changed this, then you may be right

on Apr 17, 2009

Orodum
if you follow the current abbreviations in the navy/army/etc. it's Tactical Command

PACFLTCOM - Pacific Fleet Command

ATLFLTCOM - (Atlantic might be dif abbrev.) Atlantic Fleet command

etc.

If you assume that time has changed this, then you may be right

im not following them.

ha that sounds kinda harsh, but im gonna stick with the TACCOM i came up with. unless a lot of people are displeased about it?

on Apr 17, 2009

No, it's your story. 

I also noticed the Kol thing before the edit. I think it was a good balance of subtlety and straightforwardness, but changing it was fine if people didn't catch that.

on Apr 18, 2009

Juggernaut10
No, it's your story. 

I also noticed the Kol thing before the edit. I think it was a good balance of subtlety and straightforwardness, but changing it was fine if people didn't catch that.
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Quoting guywhoyoudontno,
reply 12


let me no if u didnt catch this, cause i wasnt sure i made it obvious enough. i will change it to make it more obvious if people missed that connection.







It seemed pretty obvious to me...

 

well if most people saw it, then ill change it bak. i just hav to remembr wat i wrote....

on Apr 18, 2009

ok well due to popular demand, i hav revised 7,1 and 7,2 on the whole kol-jackal area. hopefully its a little more subtle but still out there enough for everyone to pick up on it. reduced the egyptian part by a paragraph, and removed the vision kol gets about the body bag. tell me what you think.

on Apr 18, 2009

    Just checking up on the progress of the story

 

on Apr 18, 2009

Wow! My avatar looks great!!!!!

on Apr 22, 2009

HiddenMaster
Wow! My avatar looks great!!!!!

that is indeed freaking awesome.

on Apr 22, 2009

so just to keep the post going while i write the end of chapter 7, id like to hear ideas for chapter 8. its going to involve zeke and the former High Coalescence that was shot by Kartente while possessing Zeke's mind. part of her was forever trapped in him, and they together have gone slightly crazy. just to giv u background. i hav part 1 of chapter 8 in my mind, but if you'd like to see Zeke/Alfr'eda (the name of the former High Coalescence) do something, post your idea and if i like it and it works into the story ill put it in! i make no promises tho, but id really like to hear what you guys want to see happen with them.

on Apr 22, 2009

Didn't Zeke get all deformed? I want to see how everyone reacts to him coming alive again.

Alfr'eda? Sounds a little like Alfredo...

on Apr 22, 2009

This is just a suggestion for future chapters. I think you should make Kol a less experienced. For example, you made it like Kol knew exactly what he was doing. You should make it where only bits and pieces of the jackals memory and skills are in him, where instead of knowing how to fly the fighter, he should have the basic idea of it and understand one thing completely while something else he doesn't understand at all, such as the navigation system.(hint) Just bits and pieces of the jackal's memories and experience in Kol, not a full understanding like the Jackal had

on Apr 22, 2009

Dude, awesome story man really awesome,  Can't wait to see what happens next

+1 Karma man, really awesome

on Apr 22, 2009

HiddenMaster
This is just a suggestion for future chapters. I think you should make Kol a less experienced. For example, you made it like Kol knew exactly what he was doing. You should make it where only bits and pieces of the jackals memory and skills are in him, where instead of knowing how to fly the fighter, he should have the basic idea of it and understand one thing completely while something else he doesn't understand at all, such as the navigation system.(hint) Just bits and pieces of the jackal's memories and experience in Kol, not a full understanding like the Jackal had

i like that. i didnt implement that in the last part because, truthfully, it was getting longish and i wanted to finish it quick. but i like the no navigation idea. someone gets lost....and accidently destroys (somehow, still working on it) then bulk of the enemy's fleet. o i hav an idea how that happens.....new post in the next couple of days, tomorrow if i can manage it

on Apr 22, 2009

Juggernaut10
Didn't Zeke get all deformed? I want to see how everyone reacts to him coming alive again.

Alfr'eda? Sounds a little like Alfredo...

haha yeah, that might be where it came from. a name just pops into my head, and if it works i put it down

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